While writing my essay I felt fairly confident in my ability
to express what I wanted to express. However after reading it over again I
could tell I had fallen short in some key areas. My paper was supposed to be
about the link between moral education and adulthood. And while my intentions
stayed the same throughout the paper I felt that I didn’t purse it effectively.
I feel that in my paper I got too interested and preoccupied in exposition and
setting up the plot. I let myself go on and on about how I ended up here and didn’t
focus on why it mattered. I allowed myself to drift away from the purpose of
the paper. I feel that my topic, the education of morals, is important. I
believe it shapes who we are as people. But, I was not very successful in
exploring this.
In my
paper I felt that my voice varied. I was unable to find a unifying tone. I felt
like I was searching for the right voice throughout the paper. Reading it over
again it felt almost artificial, like I was pandering to my audience. As for who
my audience is I didn’t put much thought into it, it was more of a “whoever”
feel. But moving forward I definitely need to identify with an audience. I also
wanted this paper to be a look at how interactions and experiences shape our
moral education. Moving forward I also need to find a way to express this to my
audience.
In my
paper I felt that I did some things effectively and others not so much. I felt I
was able to depict situations successfully. I was able to show my feelings and
thoughts with the reader. I also feel that I have a great topic that I can
expand upon further. There are some things I need to improve upon though. I
need to work on making my paper flow more smoothly. At times I feel that my
sentences and paragraphs are choppy and don’t mesh well. I also need to work on
incorporating my topic better. To remedy these issues I’m going to go back
through my paper and attempt so smooth it out with more detail and also by removing
some unneeded fluff.
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